,Life is not easy for everyong.when you smile,follower is coming out.But when you cry ,follower is also ablooming.good mood can make you success,helping you get over difficulties in life.Never give up and never give in by fate.
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,有老师指出你的几处错，供参考。但我不在意，我能明白你的意思！意境很好！Never,or not? --------> （X） 不知道何意Life is not easy for everyong, --------> （？）打字错误，就算不小心when you smile,flower is coming out.. -------->（X） flower是可数名词，这里算什么用法？when you smile,flower is coming out.：这叫什么？ 怎么你一笑，就有花出来呢？这是不可能的。纯粹中文思维。But when you cry ,flower is also ablooming. --------> （X）同上Good mood can make you success, --------> （X）make you success 这是什么啊？会不会用补语啊？helping you get over difficulties in life. --------> （？）如果是伴随状语，与主句就总有一句是废话，如果是并列关系，则V-ing就用错了。Never give up and never give in by fate. --------> （X）give in by fate 看不懂啊那句是对的呢？
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,有老师给你更改如下，别恢心，多写！Life is not easy for everyone. While you are smiling flowers are blooming, and while you are crying flower are still blooming. A good mood can make you feel successful, and this can help you get over difficulties in life. Never give up and never give in.
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